August 27, 2019
Max’s Musings
By Max Molleston
This month wants us to dive into all kinds of pursuits. Done with summer, except for hot days that send K-12 school kids back home or somewhere other than hot school rooms. Today I take some assurance many of you will be part of some of this excitement, or not at all, as you involve yourself. We may work some about long and short poems. I can get after the poem, shorten it, and change some things, just like you would, if you are interested.
Out-Of-Round
Hard knocks; tools spilling,
nicking a lone marble
as building action opens
and shuts the box.
Contained assaults mauled
spherical perfection out-of-round
as decades pressed its surface.
Visions of perfect roundness
remain blind to violence.
Are we drawn only
to bright beauty
and pleasing roundness?
Little attention as lifestyles
meander toward mayhem?
We awake to discover
out-of-round is the message.
First of all, the lengths of lines are not uniform. Second, a poem about a marble is not very interesting. Third, I invent and install “visions of perfect roundness remain blind to violence.” That is an idea far as can be from what we might think about marbles, actually round and can be beautiful as we see them. That down on paper, I defend the final four lines moving to a conclusion that seems to straddle very hurtful current violence. “Little attention as lifestyles meander toward mayhem? We awake to discover out-of-round is the message.
My Muse is serious most of the time, but responsibility for the poetic outcome is not always fixed. I like this poem. It probably went where is should have. Next month I will get a little less carried away. Join me here, then, when I am older.
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